Some people think that humans can use animals for their benefits. Others believe that this practice is wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For millenniums,
human
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have admitted
animals
as a source of supply for food, clothes, means of transportation, etc. Part of society says that
animals
should be used to satisfy our needs. On the other side, many believe that
animals
do not deserve to be treated like that. Despite an unavoidable dependence on using
animals
, our human beings need to be cautious in taking their
advantages
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, not just using them
in
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selfish
purpuses
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purposes
or maltreating them. On the one hand, it’s understandable why many people advocate
of
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using
animals
for their
benefits
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. Though fauna is an irreplaceable protein source, supporters
for
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the
first
view point
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seem not to notice
about
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the effect of hunting activities
to
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the environment. Overhunting might cause a huge impact on biodiversity balance, which
also
affects our human beings.
Additionally
, we are depending too much on
this
supplier and forgetting to resource and develop alternatives,
such
as lab-grown meat.
This
is the achievement of cloning meat cells, making them become
scientificially
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scientifically
possible to digest and
it
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will provide the same nutritious value as the normal one. So that can help us to reduce our dependence on
animals
However
, we cannot reject the necessity of
animals
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our lives. Even though we have developed meat grown in laboratories, its cost seems to be still so high as it’s not suitable for commercialization. But we really need to
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about the environmental problem when hunting them for our purposes, so maybe we should reduce the amount of using fauna species.
Besides
, we
are still need
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animals
to conduct medical experiments, so
that is
not really realistic to eliminate
animals
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our lives, at least until now.
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those reasons, I think
animals
should be treated more
humane
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as we still need them for our own
benefits
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. To sum up, we are still partly
dependable
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on
animals
for our
benefits
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. But we shouldn’t overuse them and mistreat them for these purposes,
instead
just be humane and find out some
practically
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alternative ways to reduce our
needs
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of using
animal
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animals
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.
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