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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience?

#everybody #admission #university #college #programs #level #ability #reason
Higher Education is
basically
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requirement
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a requirement
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 for
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 in order to get accomplishment in
specified
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the specified
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field
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 and that can be possible by attaining admission
in
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recognized
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 university.
However
, there are some prerequisites for a college to give a seat to an individual in a particular course to understand the level of the beginners in terms of academic capability. It is agreed that not everyone should be permitted to
enroll
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 in the institute. Understanding why there should be restrictions for each human being to study in a specialised class.
To begin
 with,
conditions
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 of enrolling in a
further
 education academy should be met since there are different specialist courses
which
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required so as to understand the basic concepts of the domain.
For instance
, to become
doctor
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a doctor
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, pupils must have finished their
foundations
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foundation's
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 subjects in senior high school
such
 as biology, chemistry, zoology and physics. Without them, trainees cannot commence their medicine course.
Therefore
, it is obligatory to have
capability
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 to enter into
expert
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an expert
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 area.
Secondly
, without knowing
undergraduates’
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 magnitude of
their
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competencies and learning skills, it would be nearly possible to assess their performance among their peers.
Moreover
, to be
engineer
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an engineer
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, one must pass
entrance
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an entrance
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 examination in India to get to identify the theoretical knowledge of engineering. Through
this
, shortlisted candidates would be offered admission
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 schools and their proficiencies would be
more
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enhanced.
Hence
, it is mandatory to have some obligations to determine the extent of the graduates. To summarise,
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the institution
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institution
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institutions
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 of higher education should allow merely those applicants who are eligible to gain background information
at
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campus
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the campus
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 after
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a thoroughly
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thoroughly
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 skills assessment so that deserving contestants would be enrolled.
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