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It's not necessary to travel place to learn about other cultures of other people.we can learn just as much from books,films and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that it is not mandatory to travel to different regions to get to know different cultures.
Instead
, we can use different ways
such
 as reading books, watching movies and browsing the internet. I agree with the two approaches because both of them are equally beneficial and interesting.
Although
 it's challenging to visit new places,
traveling
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 provides many
people
 with choices to meet new
people
 and
give
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 opportunities for profitable businesses.
In other words
,
people
 have many chances to improve their knowledge about other counties and progress in
business
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.
For instance
, my uncle is a
traveler
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. Several years ago he
traveled
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 to China for the holiday and he met a successful businessman who was interested in investing in Iran. So they have started working with each other ever since he
traveled
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 to China.
Therefore
,
to roam
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 different regions can broaden our horizons.
On the other hand
,
wondering
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 around costs a lot of money and effort. While
globilisation
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globalisation
globalization
 makes it easy to know about different regions, the adventures can waste a lot of valuable
people
's time and money.
People
 are able to connect to the world through websites.
For instance
, humans are able to participate in fashion week in Paris through
website
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the website
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 by giving feedback and sending comments. In brief,
population
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 is able to access other
country's
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countries'
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 information through social media, surfing
on
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the internet, watching movies and reading books without the need to roam. In conclusion, from my perspective, both approaches are useful and attractive
although
 roaming costs a lot of time and money. If humankind prefers to explore other counties to learn about them, it results in improving their business and relations. So it depends on the individual's preference to
wonder
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 around or obtain information from the internet and books.
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