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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #lives #change
In our
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 society, there are often many twists and turns in our
life
 where
changes
 might be necessary. Some people find comfort and security in performing the same tasks or going through the same routine and are reluctant to change, while others purpose that we should welcome
changes
 as a part of our lives. In
this
 essay, we should explore both sides of these perspectives. At
first
 glance, a major change in your
life
 might appear daunting because we find a sense of ease and safety in the repeatable tasks that we perform, especially when those tasks are job-related. People often gain confidence by polishing their skills or techniques by
practicing
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, playing the same song on the piano would be an example. Many other occupations require impeccable expertise with little room for error, surgeons and firefighters are two representatives who will benefit from repeatable training and daily routines.
However
, even the perfect song can sound dull if you listen to it over and over again. Humans gain
inspirations
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 from new stimuli,
new
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 knowledge
also
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 us introspect, improve learnt skills and improvise shall there be
such
 needs in the future. Since
changes
 are often unavoidable despite our utmost effort, it's important to grasp the opportunity to learn so we can become more resilient to unforeseeable
changes
. I strongly believe that we should attempt to adapt to the
changes
 when they are presented to us at the right time,
that is
 precisely how we broaden our horizons and gain insights
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 many aspects of
life
.
Changes
 do not have to be
life altering
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 at
first
, small steps like taking a new route to work may take you by surprise, might it be a scenery you will appreciate or a new cafe that sells the most delicious muffin that you will miss
otherwise
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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