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The charts compare the ratio of water usage for different objectives in six sites of the world.

The charts compare the ratio of water usage for different objectives in six sites of the world.
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The charts compare the ratio of
water
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 usage for different objectives in six sites of the world.
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, in many parts of the globe,
the
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water
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 is mainly used for agricultural purposes. For the population of Central, Asia
water
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 serves as a source for agricultural development where almost 90
percent
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 of
water
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 is used for
this
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 sector. Less aqua is consumed for domestic use (7%)
while
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 only a tiny fraction (5%) is used in
industrial
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the industrial
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 field. In comparison, in Africa, South East Asia, and South
America
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 agricultural area
are
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account for 84%, 81%, and 71%, respectively.
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, in South East Asia, in comparison to other mentioned areas, more liquid is spent by
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector
while
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 almost two times less
water
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are
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 used by ordinary citizens. In Europe and North
America
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, the situation is completely different. Almost
a
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half of
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water
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the water
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 in both areas
are
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is
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 consumed by industrial field,
while
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 only 39% of
water
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 in North
America
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 and 32% in Europe
are
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 spent
for
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 agricultural goals. 13% of
water
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 in Europe and 15% in North
America
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 are used for domestic purposes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "ratio" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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