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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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Nowadays some
people
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 believe that the residential
area
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 should be kept clean and tidy by
the
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its
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residents.
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, some
individual
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individuals
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 argue that
government
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 should handle
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 job.
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 essay will examine both
side
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sides
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 of
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this
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these
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 contrasting views and my opinion that the local
people
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 should involve to keep their
area
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 clean will be given. On the
on
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 hand,
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government
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the government
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 should responsible for keeping the
area
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 clean and tidy as they can issue
the
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 law to prevent
the
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risk
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 activities that make the
area
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 dirty.
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, in Singapore,
people
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 will need to pay an expensive fine when they do not throw away their garbage in the bin even if it was a small piece.
Addionally
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, the
government
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 already collect taxes from their citizens so they should be the one who
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this
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 money to clean the public
area
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.
On the other hand
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, I strongly agree that individuals in the
community
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 should participate to keep their
area
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 neat because the result might be better if more local
people
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 cooperate together. To give a clear example, in some
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community
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communities
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, there is a big cleaning day every month when residents gather together to clean their neighbourhood.
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community
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 participation
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also
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raise
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the
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awareness of
clean
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 society. Another reason is that the
government
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 does not have much time and budget to spend more on keeping its country clean as there are more urgent and important issues to solve
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lack
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a lack
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 of
healthcare
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a healthcare
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 system, poor
eduction
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education
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 and
poverlty
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poverty
. To conclude, with all
reason
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reasons
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 taken into account,
although
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government
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 should have the duty to keep its country tidy, the other social and economic issues are more important for
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government
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the government
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 to focus
.
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, I strongly believe that the residents in the
community
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 should make their
area
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 neat and tidy.
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