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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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Nowadays some
people
 believe that the residential
area
 should be kept clean and tidy by
the
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its
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residents.
However
, some
individual
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individuals
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 argue that
government
 should handle
this
 job.
This
 essay will examine both
side
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 of
this
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these
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 contrasting views and my opinion that the local
people
 should involve to keep their
area
 clean will be given. On the
on
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one
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 hand,
government
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the government
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 should responsible for keeping the
area
 clean and tidy as they can issue
the
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 law to prevent
the
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risk
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 activities that make the
area
 dirty.
For example
, in Singapore,
people
 will need to pay an expensive fine when they do not throw away their garbage in the bin even if it was a small piece.
Addionally
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Additionally
, the
government
 already collect taxes from their citizens so they should be the one who
utilise
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this
 money to clean the public
area
.
On the other hand
, I strongly agree that individuals in the
community
 should participate to keep their
area
 neat because the result might be better if more local
people
 cooperate together. To give a clear example, in some
community
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communities
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, there is a big cleaning day every month when residents gather together to clean their neighbourhood.
This
community
 participation
is
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also
raise
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raises
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the
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apply
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awareness of
clean
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 society. Another reason is that the
government
 does not have much time and budget to spend more on keeping its country clean as there are more urgent and important issues to solve
such
 as
lack
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 of
healthcare
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a healthcare
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 system, poor
eduction
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education
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 and
poverlty
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poverty
. To conclude, with all
reason
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reasons
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 taken into account,
although
government
 should have the duty to keep its country tidy, the other social and economic issues are more important for
government
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the government
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 to focus
.
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Thus
, I strongly believe that the residents in the
community
 should make their
area
 neat and tidy.
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