Some people think universities should provide practical knowledge rather than theoretical subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The primary purpose of tertiary
education
is to prepare graduates for their
future
careers. It is often said that universities educated their student with
the
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theoretical subjects. Some people argued to include practical and
skills
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knowledge
as well. In my opinion, the university should organise their course or
education
scheme for practical
knowledge
the same as theoretical
knowledge
.
This
essay will discuss the debate and give a concluding view.
First
and foremost, people go to universities to attend higher
education
and ensure their
future
with
a better careers
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. Apart from
this
, theory
knowledge
is not enough for
students'
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prepare
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for their
future
after graduation.
For instance
, many people are unemployed due employers often value experience over
education
, and there is so much competition among graduates to start over others. With the additional practical
knowledge
from universities, students will have some experience before landing their
first
jobs and preparing for
future
life.
In addition
, students will develop their character and attain some of the most experience before graduating. In my conclusion, practical skills should be included in university
education
,
furthermore
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the graduates will achieve their
aspiration
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in their job if they are well equipped with
knowledge
and skills together.
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