Some people think that humans can use animals for their benefits. Others believe that this practice is wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Animals

have been utilized by humans for ages, in many aspects

such

as food or medicine, but nowadays some people believe that the performance

on

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animals

for personal or social benefits is wrong and needs to be prohibited,

however

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it is impossible to stop using

animals

for our

benefits

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. On one side, humans have been using

animals

for personal purposes

such

as clothes, medicine,

food

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and food

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…., which leads to a faith that

animals

is

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the key to

solve

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many problems.

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, we cannot detest the fact that

animals

comes

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with many profits especially when they provided us with a rich source of proteins and vitamins

form

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their meat and milk.

Nevertheless

, it is very cruel to use

animals

for selfish purposes like

thousands

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cases of cutting off

Rhinos

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horns for traditional Chinese medicine

,

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or hunting down grizzlies or tigers for their fur which is commonly used in

fashion

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industry for making fur coats.

This

is truly a

sinfulness

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action. Despite the undeniable profits of

animals

provided us.

However

, I’m more likely to lean towards the idea of treating

animals

more humanitarian since they can feel pain and

afraid

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of death just like we do, there are many solutions for

this

issue

like

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we can make a contribution by eating less meat and support the vegetarian diet, which can create an enormous change in our lifestyle, on top of that people needs to change their perspectives of how they see

animals

and condemn the poaching of wild

animals

, which can make a huge impact in society since everyone is against

this

cruel and selfish action. In summary, I think we should try our best to reduce the consumption of

animals

as

many

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as possible, and we can do our bit by becoming a vegetarian or

criticize

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the poaching and violation of

animals

.