Films can have an effect on children’s education and teach them many things. Do you think it is always a positive influence?

It is an undeniable fact that
movies
have an impact on
children
's studies and kids are influenced by the content shown in the films. People have different opinions of
movies
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effect
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on
kids
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education
.
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analysis of
positives
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the positives
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and negatives
on
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pupils
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pupils'
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education
when they watch
movies
. On the one hand, films associated with
moral
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,history,
animals
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and animals
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have a
postive
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positive
impact on
pupils
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studies. Documentary
movies
of famous people who
exhibits
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moral
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through their actions
motivates
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students
and
making
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students
to
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think about morality. History and
animals
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movies
are translated into web series by online platforms which helps
students
to gain
the
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knowledge of world history and animals which
suppliments
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supplements
education
.parents should encourage
students
to watch relevant
movies
aiding their
education
.
On the other hand
,
children
's
education
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severly
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severely
impacted by watching
few
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a few
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films
have
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that have
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adult content, violence and
herioc
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heroic
scenes.
Children
always try to imitate the actors ,follow them, exhibit their
behavior
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and think
themselves
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as
the
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fans and spend
majority
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the majority
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of their time and neglect
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education
.Many youngsters inspired by inappropriate
movies
addicted
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to smoking ,
alchol
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alcohol
and
further
damaging the
education
In conclusion,It is true that
movies
have an effect on
children
's studies.
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