Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the increasing population around the
world
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many
people
belive
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believe
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that
a
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apply
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good nutrition is not worth
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it for
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for
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a
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one person's life
longivity
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longevity
. I strongly disagree with
this
statement. The disadvantage of
this
poor concern is the lack of sufficient knowledge and education. If a person does not maintain their proper fuel of humankind
need
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such
as a person just
eat
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junk foods and
promote
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this
to their children
this
will lead to health risk problems in a near future.
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to
this
failure
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they could face heart problems
for example
high
cholestrol
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cholesterol
, constipation, obesity or
diabates
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diabetes
. Despite
this
, there are significant benefits it can bring to
people
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lives
.
Firstly
it means that
people
have the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
to explore their body connections.
For
instance
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many
people
getting interested in Yoga and Pilates nowadays.
This
enriches many
people
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lives
as they get to learn their own body muscles
strength
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strengths
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and weaknesses.
In addition
to
this
, if someone puts some good
efforts
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for
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themselves like walking and jogging they always feel motivated,
energetic
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and energetic
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.
Majority
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of them
they
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successd
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success
succeed
succeeded
in their work.  I would
therefore
argue that
although
disadvantages
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of the current trend to get lazy
moreover
doinf
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doing
nothing , they
are
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outweigh
by
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the advantages . it can enrich
people
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people's
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lives
adn
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and
lives
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the lives
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of the
people
of every generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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