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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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world
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news
however
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 of
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 it is always
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advisable
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 hand, Newspapers are the oldest
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accumulating
 awareness
moreover
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method
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news
.
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 all the age
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groups
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 are not that tech
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savvy
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 of the usage of
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electronic
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, India's more than 51
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 of
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the population
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 are buying
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newspapers
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 daily. To summarize
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, getting
news
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 is still beneficial for society at large
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other hand
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, Due to
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the advancement
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 of educational
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levels
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the scaricity
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scaricity
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scarcity
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no body
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nobody
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 is having enough time to read all lengthy
newspaper
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newspapers
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hence
this
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plateform
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platform
 allows them to fulfil their needs according to the time available
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 them. I have observed so many people
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using their mobile devices to feed
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herself
theirself
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themselves
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 for informative subjects while they are travelling in the metro whereas some of them getting it on the radio or F.M. installed in their vehicles,
hence
 updation is becoming easy with the help of
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the Internet
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, I support the idea of using modern techniques for getting
news
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scenario
every one
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everyone
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 is connected with
world
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the world
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 wide web and
having
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 access to the multiple online
plateforms
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platforms
 which in one way to another help us
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 updated.
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