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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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It is argued that
people
 who live in the neighbourhood ought to be responsible for cleaning and tidying their
place
. But some others exposed that the government has to do it. In my opinion, I think it depends on both residents and the government. I have some reasons below to explain
this
.
First
 of all, the authorities should create rules and force citizens to do it which helps them become good habits.
Moreover
, they could support local
people
 to clean streets or trash by providing them
enough
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 bins and directing them where to put garbage.
For instance
, before the street in my
place
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 there was a lot of litter from
people
 living around
here
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there
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. But when the mayor of the city gave a law to punish persons who put trash out of bins
500.000
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at 500.000
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 VND per fault. Everyone in my neighbourhood has become tidier and cleaner.
Second
 of all, The residents should be aware of themself to protect
their
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the
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 environment where they live all their life.
In addition
, when they finish work and come back home through the road and smell
there
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their
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place
 air. If the air smells bad it could impact
on
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apply
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their health.
For example
, near my mother's house, there is a trash-heap and
people
 put litter out there,
then
 smell and stink fly everywhere around my mother’s house. She had a headache all day and planned to move to another
place
. In conclusion, both of us those who are citizens and authorities should be responsible and clean ‘our home’ is the earth.
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