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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays many people make purchases with
credit
cards
 rather than with cash. The reason behind it could be that
credit
cards
 are easy to
use
 and have some refundment benefits as a “cash-back”.
However
, even if there are some drawbacks
such
 as
cyberattack
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a cyberattack
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 on your account, I think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Firstly
,
credit
cards
 are more comfortable and safe to
use
. Especially when it comes to big purchases like a car or apartment, it is easier to pay
by
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with
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 a
one
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apply
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little
plastic-card
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plastic card
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 in comparison to a
couple
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ofcouple
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 pockets of cash.
In addition
, you could simply lose all the cash in an accident, while
credit
cards
 are way more secure to
use
 due to pin-codes and other verification methods. As a matter of
fact
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 statistics have shown that more than 67% of Kazakhstanis
use
credit
cards
,
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 since it is a more practical and efficient way to pay.
Moreover
, some of the banks provide a refundment system which calls a cash-back.
Cash-back
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A Cash-back
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 system keeps a certain amount of money whenever you make purchases and it can be spent later for any other purposes.
For example
,
the
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one of the most popular banks in Kazakhstan- Kaspi Bank- always adds 10% of the cash-back for each payment, and if you buy an iPhone for $1500 with Kaspi, it will refund you $150 extra, so it can be spent on new AirPods. In conclusion, despite the fact that there are some chances to lose money because of
the
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digital attacks on bank accounts, people will keep on paying by
credit
cards
 due to
its
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their
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 profitability and usefulness.
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