UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

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modern era, employment rates have increased compared to the past. While

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in some non-developed countries

unemployment

is one of the major issues rather than others.

However

, I personally believe that employment totally depends on a person’s skill and knowledge. In

this

essay, I will give what are the causes of

unemployment

and suggest some solutions related to

this

problem. There are many reasons behind

unemployment

To begin

with, the government does not pass vacancies for uneducated society.

In addition

, globalisation is one of the biggest problems behind the decreased rate of

unemployment

Moreover

, the educated community is not satisfied with their working life and low salaries affect a professional's mindset

also

they cannot find a specific company that pays more according to the skills that they have.

On the other hand

, there are some solutions to solve

this

problem.

Firstly

, the government has to conduct a survey on joblessness and

then

give notices through the use of newspapers and advertisements. To illustrate

this

, recently Reliance group and TATA group passed short notice for labourers to work in their huge industries.

Lastly

, these types of industries can easily give jobs to non-educated society and these jobless people will have jobs and earn money. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that there are lots of skills and courses, which will definitely increase the employment rates.

However

, somewhere the government would have to pass the open post and vacancies, where illiterate people easily improve their

career

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and fulfil their basic needs from their earnings.

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UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

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