some say that, art and drama are as important as important as other school subjects especially at the primary level. do you agree or disagree?

#say #art #drama #school #subjects #level

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Nowadays, some

people

Use synonyms

say that

art

Use synonyms

and

drama

Use synonyms

have a value as same as other school subjects

especially

Add the comma(s)

,especially

show examples

at the

basicaly

Correct your spelling

basic

level.

Thus

Linking Words

, the essay aims to elaborate

the

Change preposition

on the

show examples

reasons why I

partically

Correct your spelling

particularly

partially

agree aforementioned.

To begin

Linking Words

with,

People

Use synonyms

have

a knowledge

Remove the article

knowledge

a piece of knowledge

show examples

about

art

Use synonyms

drama

Use synonyms

even if a little, they can spread for their future

job

Use synonyms

's possibility.

This

Linking Words

is because, comparing

people

Use synonyms

who do not have knowledge

not

Add the comma(s)

,not

show examples

at all about

art

Use synonyms

drama

Use synonyms

, others have

possibility

Add an article

the possibility

a possibility

show examples

to intrigued relative jobs

such

Linking Words

as actor / actress or artist

which

Correct pronoun usage

who

show examples

is painting or

crafter

Replace the word

crafting

show examples

. To illustrate, if created amazing painting by a

child

Use synonyms

in their school class,

Use synonyms

child

Add an article

the child

a child

show examples

may feel good and

Correct article usage

the viewer

show examples

viewer

Fix the agreement mistake

viewers

show examples

noticed the

child

Use synonyms

sence

Correct your spelling

sense

to become

big

Add an article

a big

show examples

artist. After, the

child

Use synonyms

is really into

art

Use synonyms

and

get

Correct subject-verb agreement

gets

show examples

the

Correct article usage

show examples

relative

job

Use synonyms

However

Linking Words

, if the

child

Use synonyms

did not meet that chance which

interested

Replace the word

interest

show examples

in arts, the

Use synonyms

child

Change noun form

child's

show examples

future way to proceed relative

art

Use synonyms

job

Use synonyms

colsed

Correct your spelling

closed

possibly.

Therefore

Linking Words

experience is worthwhile at least.

However

Linking Words

drama

Use synonyms

art

Use synonyms

relative

job

Use synonyms

miner

Add an article

a miner

show examples

for our society comparing

another

Fix the agreement mistake

other jobs

show examples

job

Use synonyms

for the sake of demand

Change the verb form

are

show examples

few for our living.

For example

Linking Words

, the

oppotunity

Correct your spelling

opportunity

hardly confuse for living even if

art

Use synonyms

drama

Use synonyms

Correct subject-verb agreement

does

show examples

not exist. So when

people

Use synonyms

seek

Change preposition

apply

show examples

that amusement, they have

Add an article

a situation

the situation

show examples

situation

Fix the agreement mistake

situations

show examples

when they have

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

free time or enough money only.

In other words

Linking Words

, if that amusement

dissapeard

Correct your spelling

disappears

, we can live.

Thus

Linking Words

it can describe that

artist

Fix the agreement mistake

artists

show examples

or actor / actress is difficult for them to make ends

meeet

Correct your spelling

meet

. In conclusion, I reiterate that

partialy

Correct your spelling

partially

people

Use synonyms

may spread their

job

Use synonyms

variations,

Linking Words

however

Add a comma

,however

show examples

almost

Correct your spelling

most

show examples

people

Use synonyms

get

non-relative

Add an article

a non-relative

the non-relative

show examples

Use synonyms

job

Fix the agreement mistake

jobs

show examples

for

art

Use synonyms

drama

Use synonyms

. So I

partically

Correct your spelling

partially

particularly

agree

that

Change preposition

with that

show examples

statement.

Submitted by euler0279 on Fri Dec 23 2022

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
38
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

280 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Write about the following topic: Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. • Write at least 250 words.
Lots of people believe that both genders have advantages and drawbacks, when it comes to careers, some professions should be only suitable for men or women. This solid thinking is considered a traditional value which develops many repercussions whilst some people continue to trust this belief that they think to be right.However, in our society now, some people believe that occupations should not base on their gender and that people have the right to achieve their dream professions. In this essay, the idea of whether careers should be limited by gender will be discussed and provide a personal view on this point of view.
5
band
Some people believe that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. Others argue that advertisements have a positive impact on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There is an ongoing debate whether advertisements aimed at children need to be prohibited. While the opponents of this statement believe that commercials have a positive influence to children mindset, others argue that it is more beneficial for children to not exposured by them at all. I personally agree to the latter argument and I will elaborate more on this essay.
5.5
band
Some people believe that school students should be separated based on their abilities and talented, while others think that all students should study together. Discuss both views and express your opinion.
There is no denying the fact that Some people believe that school students should be separated based on their abilities and talents, while others think that all students should study together. while it is a commonly held belief that Some folks believe that school students should be separated based on their abilities, there are other people against this idea. There is an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the person who presented this clue should be punished for it.
8
band
Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There has been a contentious debate about whether university students should choose a subject based on their willingness or have a regulation to guide some students into the fields with socioeconomic advantages. I believe a balanced approach might be a better solution to answer individual interests while aligning with societal needs.
4.5
band
There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is •say what happened the last times you complained •explain what you want the manager to do.
My name is Harjeet and I usually visit near sports center because I am a sports lover. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about the changing rooms in the sports club. Also, I already noted this problem to the team leader but he did not do anything about it.

some say that, art and drama are as important as important as other school subjects especially at the primary level. do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. Others argue that advertisements have a positive impact on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that school students should be separated based on their abilities and talented, while others think that all students should study together. Discuss both views and express your opinion.

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.