some say that, art and drama are as important as important as other school subjects especially at the primary level. do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some
people
say that art
and drama
have a value as same as other school subjects especially
at the Add the comma(s)
,especially
basicaly
level. Correct your spelling
basic
Thus
, the essay aims to elaborate the
reasons why I Change preposition
on the
partically
agree aforementioned.
Correct your spelling
particularly
partially
To begin
with, People
have a knowledge
about Remove the article
knowledge
a piece of knowledge
art
or drama
even if a little, they can spread for their future job
's possibility. This
is because, comparing people
who do not have knowledge not
at all about Add the comma(s)
,not
art
or drama
, others have possibility
to intrigued relative jobs Add an article
the possibility
a possibility
such
as actor / actress or artist which
is painting or Correct pronoun usage
who
crafter
. To illustrate, if created amazing painting by a Replace the word
crafting
child
in their school class, child
may feel good and Add an article
the child
a child
Correct article usage
the viewer
viewer
noticed the Fix the agreement mistake
viewers
child
's sence
to become Correct your spelling
sense
big
artist. After, the Add an article
a big
child
is really into art
and get
Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
the
relative Correct article usage
a
job
.
However
, if the child
did not meet that chance which interested
in arts, the Replace the word
interest
child
future way to proceed relative Change noun form
child's
art
job
is colsed
possibly. Correct your spelling
closed
Therefore
experience is worthwhile at least. However
, drama
or art
relative job
is miner
for our society comparing Add an article
a miner
another
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other jobs
job
for the sake of demand is
few for our living. Change the verb form
are
For example
, the oppotunity
hardly confuse for living even if Correct your spelling
opportunity
art
or drama
do
not exist. So when Correct subject-verb agreement
does
people
seek to
that amusement, they have Change preposition
apply
Add an article
a situation
the situation
situation
when they have Fix the agreement mistake
situations
a
free time or enough money only. Correct article usage
apply
In other words
, if that amusement dissapeard
, we can live. Correct your spelling
disappears
Thus
it can describe that artist
or actor / actress is difficult for them to make ends Fix the agreement mistake
artists
meeet
.
In conclusion, I reiterate that Correct your spelling
meet
partialy
Correct your spelling
partially
people
may spread their job
variations, however
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,however
almost
Correct your spelling
most
people
get non-relative
Add an article
a non-relative
the non-relative
job
for Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
art
or drama
. So I partically
agree Correct your spelling
partially
particularly
that
statement.Change preposition
with that
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