some say that, art and drama are as important as important as other school subjects especially at the primary level. do you agree or disagree?

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and

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have a value as same as other school subjects

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at the

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reasons why I

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agree aforementioned.

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have

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about

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even if a little, they can spread for their future

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's possibility.

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who do not have knowledge

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at all about

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, others have

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to intrigued relative jobs

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as actor / actress or artist

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is painting or

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in their school class,

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may feel good and

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noticed the

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artist. After, the

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is really into

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future way to proceed relative

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closed

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experience is worthwhile at least.

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for our society comparing

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few for our living.

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that amusement, they have

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when they have

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or actor / actress is difficult for them to make ends

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. In conclusion, I reiterate that

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partially

people

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may spread their

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variations,

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for

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drama

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. So I

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partially

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statement.

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