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Some people think universities should provide knowledge and skills related to a future career; others believe the proper function of the university is to give access to knowledge for its own sake. What is your opinion of the primary part of the university?

#people #universities #skills #future #career #function #university #access #sake #part
Nowadays,Most
of
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the
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teenagers
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 dream is
get
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 access to
the
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university
.Their teachers and
prents
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parents
 are
also
 motivating them for that purpose.They believe that if anyone
earn
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university
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 degree,their future career will be ensured.
However
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 I don't stand with
this
 idea.The primary part of the
university
 should
be gave
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 access to
knowledge
 for its own sake. In Sri
lanka
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,there is spoon-feed education system in schools.
Consequently
,
students
 hope there is
same
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 system in
universities
 but they are wrong.
In contrast
,
Universities
 have
self study
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system
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.Professors do not teach their
students
.They give guidance only.
Students
 should achieve their targets with their abilities.
This
 process creates a wise man for
future
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.
University
students
 have to do
researches
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,
theasis
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thesis
 and some other experiments.if they only learn about what
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previousely
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previously
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done
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,there
is
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 no invents.
Moreover
,the responsibility of the
university
 is not only
giving
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degree
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 to
students
however
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.
Thus
 there is no advantage to
by heart
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 theories and focusing exams.Whereas the main purpose of
the
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universities
 should be
created
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to create
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 wise,responsible and well
personality
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personalities
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to
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 the world.
Furthermore
,
universities
 should be motivated their candidates for
search
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 new methods of education,
new
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and new
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 areas of subjects and
also
 prepare their own path of
knowledge
.
Finally
,the given freedom
of
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get
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knowledge
give
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 back more
benifits
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benefits
benefit
. In conclusion,If
university
provide
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 only
knowledge
 about selected career,there is no new invents for
world
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the world
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.So I believe
university
students
 can do many more
for
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make
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this
 world
better
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a better
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 place with their
knowledge
 and abilities.
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