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After finishing school, some students go travelling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do you think the advantages of gap years outweigh the disadvantages?

#school #students #work #period #time #university #gap #years
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 the crucial issue is that after finishing school, which
way
 is suitable to get achievements Some
people
 conceive that they should keep on their education
in contrast
, other
people
 claim that they should enter to
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market
 immediately to obtain success . There are diverse reasons to justify
to continue
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 higher education.
Now days
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, we are facing
with
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various development in the world and most firms are willing to employ
people
 who
has
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 authentic degree
thus
, it is
vital
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 issue for young
people
 if they want to gain prodigious achievements
furthermore
, having
degree
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 can steer young
people
 to create their personal
market
 in a field that they are expert. They have sufficient information about that and it can be a milestone for them to flourish their talent in a specific
way
 that they have studied.
In
contrast
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 some
people
 argue that the best
way
 to earn more money is
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labor
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market
. We can express some logical reasons
about
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 that.in some
cases
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 it is a certain
way
.
Firstly
, young
people
 can
ern
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 money without any hesitation after
their
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high school and it is so helpful for them to improve their confidence so, they can start
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independence
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 life
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in addition
 it is possible for them to obtain some tremendous experience
as a result
 , they are able to accomplish great tasks at
young
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 age. To sum up,
people
 have various
conviction
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 about
this
 topic some of them believe that young
people
 have to spend time to get
degree
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 in
specific
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 field yet some
people
 claim that if young
people
 desire to get achievements they ought to enter to
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the labor
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labor
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labour
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market
.
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