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Some people believe that all students should wear uniform when going to school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
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belives
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 that
students
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 should wear
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uniform
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a uniform
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insterad
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instead
 of normal clothing. Some might argue that
students
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 should wear normal
clothes
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instead
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 of
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uniform
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uniforms
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. In my
opinion
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belives
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 that wearing
uniform
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 help
students
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 with organization and
united
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. Wearing
school
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uniform
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 helps
students
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 with clothing burden since everyone
wear
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 the same
uniform
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.
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, no discriminations and individuals worry about
style
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. To some extent, can help with the bully in
school
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 due to
style
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, wearing the same
uniform
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 means that everyone
wear
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 the same thing,
thus
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, less styling and
unite
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. As
of
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students
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student
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 of
private
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a private
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school
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schools
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 in
Canada
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 I not feeling left out since
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I wvery
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wvery
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every
one
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apply
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wearingg
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wearing
 the same things.
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, I
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belives
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 that
be
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 able to wear normal
clothes
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 can bring
students
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' personality and
style
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.
Eventhough
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, it might bring some
discriminations
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discrimination
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 toward
individual's
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an individual's
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 sense of
fasion
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fashion
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, in public
school
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 wearing normal
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 is normal.
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, some
individual
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individuals
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 might face some
discriminations
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discrimination
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but
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students
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 are able to express themself
thorugh
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through
 their individual
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style
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styles
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.
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, be able to express them self In short. I
belives
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 that wearing normal
clothes
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 can help
students
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 to express their
personality
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personalities
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.
Also
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, after
the
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globolizations
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globalisation
students
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 are able to express
them self
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themself
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