It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opnion? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Learning to distinguish between good and bad is essential for children when they are infants. One quality that helps parents in
this
way is
punishment
. I
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partially
agree with
this
statement. In
this
essay, I will explain my mindset and introduce the appropriate sorts of punishments.
Kids
cannot understand the difference between positive and negative actions, so, it is parents' duty to teach them and prevent them from wrong practices by punishing them occasionally.
To begin
with, one of the most efficient
approach
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to make children aware of the consequences of anything wrong they do is
punishment
.
For example
, after an underage person disrespects
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their elders
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,
mother
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their mother
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or father can ban him from playing video
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untill
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until
he shows a sign of
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recreation
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vegetation
.
In addition
, punishing the
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could save them from any probable danger, which is a precaution for
kids
to avoid from peril ways.
Although
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agree with behaviour
punishment
and what therapists accepted, I am totally against hurting
kids
physically.
This
attitude has various side effects on them.
Thus
, parents should know what they do today for
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must be done with knowledge about it.
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, if a child does something offensive, the elders have to
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with a
sophosticated
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sophisticated
psychologist before doing a
punishment
.
However
, many modern
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are conscious
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this
field and they prefer to talk with
kids
in the
first
step, which is highly recommended. To sum up, punishments accepted by
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experts
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effective role in educating and teaching them to be known the differences between right and wrong,
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physical responses to bad behaviours can damage their mental health.
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