some say that, art and drama are as important as important as other school subjects especially at the primary level. do you agree or disagree?

It is said by some people that
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activities
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as
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and music courses should be followed
besides
academic lessons because they are extremely essential. I agree with
this
statement to some extent.
To begin
with, in some ordinary students there is a hidden artist who has not trained yet. If
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appropriate class for them not be existed, their potential in artistic works will not be found, which has drawbacks for that student and society at the same time.
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, imagine
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education system
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and had to learn about math and physic
instead
of playing
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and learning music theory. we would not be able to listen to
such
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if he did not follow art.
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,
as a result
, the pupils who are participated in
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of activities, have shown better performance in academic exams. Actually, having entertainment in school as a
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class helps youth
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not
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stress and not be
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with numbers and science fields for all the time.
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, in my institute, our teachers
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assisting the parents launched
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cours
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, which I experienced less anxiety after joining. Because I turned all my thoughts into shapes on the
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canvas
. To sum up,
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youngsters need to bloom their talents which are useful for the individual and
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nation.
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they can be calmed, and be free of the fear of exams.
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