It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some think it is significant for
people
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to put their lives in danger in professional and personal aspects. In my opinion, I think there are advantages and disadvantages but mainly to reach
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targets, it is important to take risks
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taking risks will reduce the comfort in
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for a shorter duration or for the whole lifetime.
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with advantages, most importantly taking risks lead
people
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to gain countless opportunities. When we take the history of the
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who invented new ideas, the majority of them are known to be
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risk-takers.
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, The Wright brothers who invented the
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air plane
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was became
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a success
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success
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not only in their personal
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but to the whole
mankind
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of mankind
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.
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successful idea was the base
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the most convenient travel method which is used by thousands of
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to connect with the whole globe since
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.
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, there are many drawbacks as well. Most of them affect on
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term but there are
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incidents of lifetime threats on individuals.
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, some
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change their jobs from which they can earn higher salaries to less paid jobs to enter into
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career paths.
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will have a short-term impact on individuals with a lot of sacrifices in their lives but the long-term benefits will be countless.
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, some
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faced
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with
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life
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danger while risking their lives in extreme physical activities in order to make new records. In conclusion, I believe that there are tremendous new opportunities are result
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the
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risk takers though there are a lot of short-term and long-term drawbacks. So, I admit that the advantages are worth
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comparing the drawbacks .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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