All education, primary, secondary and further education, should be free to all people and paid for by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some
says
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that
education
should be
subsedised
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subsidised
subsidized
by the government to allow all people
a
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free
education
, even for
further
education
.
Although
this
will impact the government budget in
short-term
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the short-term
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, it will be reflected positively on the country's GDP in the
long-term
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long term
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.
Also
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,Also
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it can reduce
crime
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rate
significantly. Waiving
education
fees will allow more people to start or
contenous
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continue
their
study
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studies
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, where they can obtain the needed knowledge and skills to
enroll
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in the working force.
This
means that the generated income for the population will increase as
will
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well
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as
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the spending rates. All
this
circuled
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circled
money will push the country's GDP higher. Another advantage will be a decline in the
crime
rate
. Study shows that in any society the
crime
rate
is almost always higher in poor, uneducated countries.
This
because
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that
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a person with no
education
cannot support himself financially since
its
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it's
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hard for him to get a job without any
education
. In conclusion, since
the
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free
education
in
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all levels has a positive
impacts
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impact
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in
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on
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the
countrie's
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country's
GDP and
also
it can contribute significantly
in
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to
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reducing the
crime
rate
,
the
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governments all around the world should
serously
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seriously
consider it.
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