It is generally believed some people are born with certain talents, for instant for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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of talents
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been a well-discussed topic recently in our society. Many people argue that
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who are born with a don will be successful in the future, regardless
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of how
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much time practice.
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, others explain that these abilities can be learnt with training and discipline. In
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essay, I am going to give both points of view, and at the
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I will give my personal opinion. On one hand, few persons
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are a lot of musicians with
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music
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than
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, these juveniles will have the skills to create new music or play the guitar much better than normal minors.
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, for them will be easier to develop these artistic capacities, and it is well-known that several current singers have
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since they were born.
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sports, we have the same scenario as many players have
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talent
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in the mental field as well as in the physical field so these sportsmen and sportswomen will not need an apprenticeship.
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, there are some
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that have been amazing without
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natural
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. To illustrate, it has already been proven that kids may become
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great artist with much discipline and responsibility, and in
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most cases
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children
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with more practice overtake
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others
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because
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, training
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natural
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. Namely, a very famous football player who is name is "Mario Balotelli" has
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wonderful skill for playing in any professional team, but he was unable to have a compromised behaviour. What is more, nobody wants to play with him and the club had to rescind their contract. Taking everything into consideration,
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,
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might be taught to become a great
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or sports person, the majority of professional artists have the gift of being different in their respective art or sport, and they always have a natural advantage over the persons without natural
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. It is for these reasons, I believe that natural
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will almost always outperform persons without
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