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Write an essay on the advantages and dis advantages of small and large families.

#dis #families
Squabbling between small and large
families
 is interminable in today's aeon. Controversy exists as it whether it is advantageous to belong to a small group of
families
 or not to
an
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 impediment to society. In
this
 essay, I will weigh up the benefits and drawbacks of small and large
families
 along with my credibility with the befitting paradigm. There are myriad reasons to agree with the meritorious side.
First
 and Foremost belongs in
the
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small
families
, making bonds stronger between them. Another positive outlook in
this
 regard is that don't need to seek permission from others or depend on anyone.
For instance
,women
always
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 afraid of
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the opinion
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opinion
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 of
other member
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in
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families
 to making
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a decision
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decision
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.
Besides
, people can live on their own stand to manage
fiananical
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financial
 resources without
relies
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 on anyone. In short, the inducement of its bright side is
self evident
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.
On the other hand
, we can save
alot
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a lot
 of money to
living
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 in
the
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large
families
. To put
in other words
,
to
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living
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in
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 the same roof building,
dont
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don't
 need to pay rent money and reduce
usuage
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usage
 of product items. In recent times,
demand
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of
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houses
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accodamation
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acclamation
 has increased. To live in the same building, each individual has
contributing
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 great effort towards
the
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society.Another obstruction related to
this
 issue is people don't
need
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 suffer from solitary life. Needless to say, all the points
in
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a
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good
steam
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stream
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. In recapitulation, the main preposition
this
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 essay elucidated
virtuae
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virtual
virtue
 and
hicupps
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hiccups
 of living in
large
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 group has more weighage than cons by owning to the stated reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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