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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or coeducational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, there is an option for parents to send their
kids
 to single-sex
schools
 or coeducational
schools
. Even though there are some advantages, many people believe that children who are going to same-sex
schools
 have disadvantages in the future. I strongly agree with
this
 view and will explain my ideas in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, childhood is a golden age where
kids
 are able to learn everything about life. If since when they were
kids
 and have not had an opportunity to interact with the opposite gender, they will feel awkward or hard to socialize later in the real world condition. They will never understand there is a difference between both sexes.
Moreover
,
this
 condition might hinder them from having
a good social skills
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 in the future.
Second
, if the children are taught in a mixed-sex class, they have an opportunity to learn from a different point of view. Boys and girls think differently, they
also
 have varied ways to express their feelings.
Furthermore
, if they have a lack of exposure to
such
 experiences, it will make them if facing a problem later.
In addition
, the worst scenario is
this
 could
also
 lead to marital issues and could turn into unpleasant situations. To sum up, even though parents these days have an opportunity to choose to send their
kids
 to single-sex
schools
 or mixed-sex school, I believe there is a lot
advantage
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of advantage
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 if they choose to enrol their
kids
 on coeducational
schools
, and the experiences will help the
kids
 to interact in social interaction in the future.
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