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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress.to what extend do you agree or disagree.

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There has long been a public debate about the fact that
music
 has an integral role in
people
's
life
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 and it makes
contribution
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a contribution
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 to decreasing
stress
,
furthermore
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 I am a huge fan of
this
 theory and the reasons
of
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 my opinion about
this
 topic will be discussed in
this
 essay. In these contemporary
circumstances
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people
 are suffering from
a
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huge
stress
 because of some problems
such
 as recession or family issues in their
life
thus
 social members need to do some preventable treatment to reduce their
stress
 and obviously not only does
music
 play a profound impact on curbing
stress
 but
also
 it can enhance
people
's enthusiasm.
for example
, numerous studies from Oxford University have found that
people
 who listen to songs for half an hour will increase their passion and decrease
their
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stress
 or even
pressures
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 that they are experiencing in their
life
. It seems to me that
music
 performs a key role in curing diseases like depression or mental demolition
thus
listen
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listening
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 to songs or singing can help social members who are fighting
with
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mental diseases and there is no denying the fact that
music
 is able to encourage
people
 to pursue their
life
 with passion. For instant
listen
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 to
music
 exert a positive and astonishing effect on students' minds before exams and it helps students to mitigate their
nervous
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nervousness
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. To sum up, in
this
 modern and sophisticated world
music
 performs a key role in
people
's minds so it can make a contribution to reducing their anxiety and it is crystal clear that
music
 boosts
enthusiasm
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the enthusiasm
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 and passion of students and social members
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