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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People who live in the 21st century have a better life than people who lived at times before.
This
 opinion, I think, is shared by many people, and I am no exception. The advantages of living in the 21st century are exactly in technology, and
this
 is well known. Everyone uses technology daily, hourly,
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 minute. We constantly call, write and read using electronic devices.
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 because thanks to
this
 we can develop constantly, in many areas at the same time. The disadvantage of modern society
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 its selfishness. We are all
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 only on ourselves and our benefit. No one thinks about anything else, cares or empathizes with it. All forces are
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 only on one's own success. Perhaps no one is more important than himself, but do not forget that if there were no society, there would be no man either. I'm content with my life in
this
 century, and I didn't want to
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 the early days, time goes by and man is improving, becoming an increasingly worthy inhabitant of
this
 planet.
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