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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or to valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A part of society stands on the idea that
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 it is useful to share as much data as possible in technical research, business and academics globally,
on the other hand
, some individuals are of the opinion that some data is on a high level important to be shared freely. In
this
 essay, I will explain both sides of
this
 and share my own opinion. To start with, sharing some public data has been useful for people around the world, and they were able to use it and solve some of their problems. To show you what I mean, in developing their business, using available
information
 and
also
 studying to increase their public advice.
On the other hand
, some
information
 is greatly valuable and important, and for them, a lot of time and money has been spent, and it can not be provided to people around the world for free, as a real-life example, drug combinations that pharmacists have spent a lot of time studying and many have done experiments that can make insignificant and confidential,
in addition
, some people may be profiting from confidential
information
 for their benefit, to use. In a way of conclusion, in
this
 paper, both opposing views above, regarding
information
 are discussed. And in my ,opinion public
information
 and confidential
information
 should be separated and public
information
 made available for public use.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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