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In many countries large amounts of foods are wasted. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away?

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Every day, many
people
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 in different parts of the world don't consume the whole meal they prepared and the leftovers are thrown away. I strongly believe that
people
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 are stuck in a
luxury
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 behaviour, so they make a large
amount
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 of
food
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 for every meal. In my opinion, the best way to decrease
this
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 is to teach
people
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 through
culture
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 to not cook more than their needs. Nowadays
people
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 are stuck in a
luxury
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 lifestyle due to the effects of social media and other media like TV. In the
luxury
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 lifestyle, families do not like to have less
food
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 on the table.
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,
people
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 didn't pay a lot of attention to decorating the
food
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 or making a large
amount
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 of
food
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 in my country four decades ago, but these days, they prefer to have a huge portion of
food
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 at their tables every meal. In
this
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 case, there will be a large
amount
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 of
food
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that is
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 not eaten. To decrease
this
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 huge portion of thrown-away
food
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, we can teach
people
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 through
culture
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, so the
culture
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 will be built inside the families. The key point is to start teaching
this
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culture
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 to the children.
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, the government of my country was eager to make fastening car seatbelts a
culture
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, so they tried to make that
culture
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 through children using animations and
also
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 some sort of education at school. So the children were always there to remind their parents to fasten their seatbelts. To sum up,
people
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 learnt a
luxury
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 lifestyle and
this
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 is the cause of cooking a large
amount
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 of
food
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,
therefore
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 a lot of
food
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 is thrown away. To decrease the number of leftovers in each family there is a need to make a new
culture
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food waste
  • excessive
  • portion sizes
  • expiration dates
  • storage
  • preservation
  • inefficient
  • cultural
  • incentives
  • reduce
  • awareness
  • education
  • planning
  • organization
  • misinterpretation
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