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Today people are living in a throwaway society where they use things for a short time only and then throw them away. What are the causes of this and what problems can it lead to?

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Nowadays people are throwing out
products
 after a short period of time.
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 it leads to
the
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environmental consequences and
also
 some dreadful diseases can spread. In the following paragraphs, I will describe some of my opinions like how it is dangerous to the
environment
.
For instance
, older people keep up things with them for a long time. They believed that the
products
 can be used by our ancestors. And the old
products
 are stable and long-lasting. So, they did not throw away the
products
 easily. But the above-said type of properties cannot be seen in today's
products
. Most of the
products
 are made up of plastic. After using the product for a few days, it can bend. So that the people not keeping the
products
 with them. The throw-away
products
 are dumped into the land. So, it creates some causes to the
environment
 like global warming, by eating those, some animals lead to endangered.
The recycled
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 plastics are used to make items. Another reason is there someone has the habit of changing their items at the home every month. In conclusion, by throwing away the
products
,
it
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 can be landed into the soil. So, it can affect the
environment
.
Also
, cause health problems for humans. These activities should be avoided to take care of our
environment
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