Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s life others think adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.Discuss both views and give your opinion .

No doubts teenager has
less
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responsibilities
than grownups.
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, people tend to think that
they
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it was a golden stage
on
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in
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their
life
, with a lot of fun and way
less
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burdens on their shoulders. in
this
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we are going to discuss
teenagers
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teenagers'
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and
adults
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adults'
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views of
happiness
and
responsibilities
. Many
researches
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illustrated a correlation between
happiness
and the
amount
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number
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of
responsibilities
that a person
experiencing
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experiences
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.
accordingly
, many people think that they were
more happy
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happier
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as
teenagers
and
claims
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claim
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that it was the best stage
on
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of
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their
life
for example
,
teenagers
are able to get out alone as
adults
to some extent with almost no
responsibilities
In addition
, they have plenty
time
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of time
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to enjoy
with
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themselves with
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friends and mates and
less
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fewer
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duties to think about.
in other words
, all
of
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that
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teenagers
think about and want is to have fun that makes them feel happy easily.
On the other hand
,
adults
generally struggle in
the
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life
with
huge
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a huge
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amount
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amounts
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of
responsibilites
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responsibilities
responsibility
and duties.
for
example
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they spent
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a considrable
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considrable
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considerable
amount of time looking for jobs, building their
carear
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career
careers
and supporting their families.
However
,
adults
generaly
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generally
do understand the world and the purpose of
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life
in
much
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a much
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better way,
in addition
, they realise that
the
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hapiness
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happiness
is not about hanging out with friends.
instead
,
happiness
can be created by
themselfs
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themselves
and the way think about what
make
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makes
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them really happy. In my experience, 
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I was
statisfied
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satisfied
how
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with how
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I spent my teenage years. I think I am happier as an adult. In my opinion,
happiness
is something that everybody can create, develop and nurture. it is a state of mind.
Morever
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Moreover
, having a purpose and having
a
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realistic expectations in
the
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life
are
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is
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a
corner stone
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cornerstone
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to
build
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building
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a happy
life
. - Background growth
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teenagers
teanagers
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teenagers
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  • spontaneity
  • profound
  • exploration
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  • vivid
  • challenges
  • personal growth
  • career satisfaction
  • nuances
  • overcoming obstacles
  • perspectives
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