With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Needless to say, taking
care
of health is more important in everyone's life.The importance of health
care
which has always debatable now became controversial. At present, there is a lot of improvement in the
healthcarecare
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health care care
healthcare care
sector. In
this
essay, I will elaborate more details about how society has to take
care
of elder
people
and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. At the start,
people
became so lazy
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due to the advance
of
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technologies
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. To
dicpher
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decipher
this
,
people
are more
depending
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upon the automated machine for
the
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household work.
Therefore
,
people
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the opportunity to
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excercise
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exercise
exercises
.Another observation related
in
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this
regard is
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, some
people
need to spend
the
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quality time with elder
people
instead
of
gluced
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glued
at mobile. To encourage elder
people
involve in other
activites
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activities
such
as walking, gardening,
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.
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Government
invest some
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budgets
budget
to
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the
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parks and sports
club
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in the local community.
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allow the citizen including elder
people
to involve in other activities to create
environment
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allow
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us to do some
excercise
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exercise
exercises
.
Thirdly
, each individual take
care
of elder
people
,
take
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them to the hospital
atleast
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at least
two times
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the
years
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for
fullbody
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full body
full-body
health checkup.
Furthermore
,
government
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should add additional extra seats in the public transport
factilites
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facilities
facility
for the elder
people
.In recent times, local management built
separate
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path
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for elder and disabled
people
to enjoy
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marina beach near the sea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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