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In some countries, many people think that is better to teach boys and girls in different institutions.

In some countries, many people think that it is better to teach
boys
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 and
girls
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 in different institutions.
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, others believe that both genders profit from going to the same school. In
this
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 essay, I will explain both views and my opinion. To start with, there are some advantages and disadvantages to single-sex
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.
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, when
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 and
girls
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 attend separate
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, they can enjoy the same atmosphere and communicate with the same
gender
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.
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, they have different behaviours, so
girls
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 are tender and
boys
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 are very nasty and rude in separate
schools
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, which is a good choice for parents.
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, studying in separate
schools
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 makes children unable to contact others of a different
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.
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, it can cause anxiety disorders when in contact with another
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.
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, I think the children can certainly be educated more effectively in terms of
gender
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 when they study in mixed
schools
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. Because studying knowledge in books is not enough while they can see different things in the
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 and body of their friends.
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, they can have a lot of communication skills when they meet different people. In summary, we can conclude that educated
boys
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 and
girls
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 can get more benefits from attending mixed
schools
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 rather than separate
schools
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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