Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why it might be the case? What could be the disadvantages if being self-employed?
Nowadays, many
people
create their own businesses as they want to have their own stores. However
, there are some risks to starting a business
if they are not fully trained. The aim of this
essay is to explore the reason why people
prefer self-employed and elucidate potential disadvantages.
To begin
with, the main benefit of running our own business
is to have freedom. If we are hired by a company, we have to follow the goal of the corporation. Thus
, people
do not have the motivation to work more than the company requires. However
, if we are self-hired, we could get paid according to
the amount of our work. For example
, if we are running a business
, and we know that even during holidays we could make good money, we might not take a rest. Besides
, we could be more creative and productive, as we know that new ideas could be applied to the field.
On the other hand
, people
hesitate to work alone, as it is not easy for them to overcome crises. When we run a business
, we sometimes are facing
unpredicted difficulties Wrong verb form
face
such
as financial crises or changes in trends. Besides
, these days big companies also
enter the market with the invincible power of information and capital power. For example
, compared with 10 years ago, many stores around me have changed as they could not survive in the harsh competitive capitalistic realism.
To sum up
, I do agree with the idea that self-employment has a lot of benefits. However
, we have to keep in mind that the failure of business
results in economic bankruptcy. We have to look at both sides very carefully and decide.Submitted by seonkorea on
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Task Response
The introduction provides an overview of the reasons for self-employment and outlines the potential disadvantages. The body paragraphs discuss the benefits and the drawbacks of self-employment. The conclusion provides a brief summary. However, the essay could benefit from a clearer and more focused introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay demonstrates a reasonable progression of ideas and uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there is room for improvement in the organization and connection between ideas within and between paragraphs.