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The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars causes many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce these problems, should we discourage people from using cars?

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people
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 are using personal
cars
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 for their convenience and it impacts many issues
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using their own
cars
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.
Traffic
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congestion
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 and pollution are arising and it affects the
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day to
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life
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humans. In order to reduce these problems, I strongly believe that
people
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 should be discouraged from using their own
cars
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, the use of personal
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 impacts
traffic
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congestion
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 and it influences the time of
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life
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 during
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office and school days,
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students and office workers have to wait more than half an hour in
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traffic
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 and it affects their health due to toxic
emission
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 from the vehicle.
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, because of the toxic
emission
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 the environment is severely impacted by
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air pollution and respiratory disease like asthma was diagnosed
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people
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. In my view,
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people
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 should be discouraged from using their own
cars
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. In order to reduce these problems
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people
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 should use public
transport
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instead
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 of their own
cars
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.
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, by using public
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 in our daily
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, there will be fewer vehicles on the road. The government can invest
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 develop public
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 for the benefit of the public.
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, by expediting
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traffic
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congestion
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 and pollution get resolved. In conclusion,
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people
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 are utilizing their own
cars
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. Because of
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, there is
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heavy
traffic
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congestion
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 and air pollutants affect regular human
life
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. In my opinion, I discourage
people
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 from using their own
cars
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instead
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 of public
transport
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.
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, by using public
transport
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 the problem of
traffic
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congestion
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 and air pollutants will be sorted out.

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