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popular events like football worldcup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#events #football #worldcup #occasions #tensions #emotions
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Have people said that some mass events or some sports
such
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worldcup
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WorldCup
world cup
,
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the olympic
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olympic
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Olympic
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 games or
esport
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esports
 games are occasions to
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 off
in
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on
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 international stage what technology
are
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apply
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there have and
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 how storge
their
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they
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 have
.
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 In the
first
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 line,I think I agree with
this
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 statement and I have two reasons to explain why I believe in that
and
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apply
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I will
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 you
reasons
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the reasons
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 in
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next
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 paragraph.
Firstly
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,
in
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 my
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 reason is
because
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that
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 there are mass events and mass sports so that will
be make
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make
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 attention for people who
interesting
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interested
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 in those around the world come to their land and
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 will be
occasions
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occasion
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 to
show
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 how
improve
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 do you have and that can make some business people interest to invest their city and that can make money to the city and that can lead
country
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the country
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 to have
improve
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 in
world
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 stage.
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