Some people thing that the government should make laws regarding nutrition and healthy lifestyle, while others think that it is a matter of personal choice and personal responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Big-brother governments in developing countries control different aspects of
people
's
life
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and set many boundaries for how they should live their life.
Thus
, more
people
think that it is the government's duty to set the roles to make
people
healthier. while many others
against
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controlling personal life choices. In
this
essay, I will discuss both arguments and clarify why government shall not interfere with
people
's personal choices. Setting laws to stop
people
from consuming unhealthy food is claimed to be a great idea for
people
who could not control their intake. enforcing
such
things could improve personal health and reduce diseases and medical bills.
Moreover
, society will feel the difference as many medical treatments could be avoided and make more room for serious problems.
For instance
, almost a fifth of
Jordan
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Jordan's
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population has diabetes that
are
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is
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linked to their diet.
On the other hand
, imposing laws on
people
and managing what they eat and drink has no room in the current era. every single person has the right to choose what to have.
Also
, it will be quite difficult for governments to manage
this
process as it will cost a huge amount of money to impose the new regulations.
For example
. If a government is really interested in providing a healthy lifestyle, they can educate their
people
about better nutrition effects
in addition
to encouraging them to have a sports routine. In my opinion, I believe that governments shall have no role in the personal choices of
people
.
However
, they can encourage
people
through advertisements and campaigns for a better healthy lifestyle.
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