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Some people thing that the government should make laws regarding nutrition and healthy lifestyle, while others think that it is a matter of personal choice and personal responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Big-brother governments in developing countries control different aspects of
people
's
life
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 and set many boundaries for how they should live their life.
Thus
, more
people
 think that it is the government's duty to set the roles to make
people
 healthier. while many others
against
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 controlling personal life choices. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both arguments and clarify why government shall not interfere with
people
's personal choices. Setting laws to stop
people
 from consuming unhealthy food is claimed to be a great idea for
people
 who could not control their intake. enforcing
such
 things could improve personal health and reduce diseases and medical bills.
Moreover
, society will feel the difference as many medical treatments could be avoided and make more room for serious problems.
For instance
, almost a fifth of
Jordan
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 population has diabetes that
are
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is
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 linked to their diet.
On the other hand
, imposing laws on
people
 and managing what they eat and drink has no room in the current era. every single person has the right to choose what to have.
Also
, it will be quite difficult for governments to manage
this
 process as it will cost a huge amount of money to impose the new regulations.
For example
. If a government is really interested in providing a healthy lifestyle, they can educate their
people
 about better nutrition effects
in addition
 to encouraging them to have a sports routine. In my opinion, I believe that governments shall have no role in the personal choices of
people
.
However
, they can encourage
people
 through advertisements and campaigns for a better healthy lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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