In some countries an increasing number of people are sufferring from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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These days it can be seen that in many nations a high density of folks are surviving with many diseases as an outcome of consuming a lot of junk
food
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. To control
this
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situation it is mandatory for
authoraties
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authorities
to implement a strong income tax rate on
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eatable things. It
is disagreed
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since the choice of eating fast
food
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is made by the community as it is not forced by anyone to have
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harmful
food
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,
government
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bodies To commence with, there are multifarious reasons for disagreement. The foremost is Consuming fast
food
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is chosen by
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individuals to make them feel good in terms of taste as there is no hard and fast rule to take these foods into their
body
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.
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, some
persons
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people
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have
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eaten
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foods since their childhood
that
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and
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they are now used to
it
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them
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very much and now even if they want to quit
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bad
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habit
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them
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, they always fail to do so easily because of taking junk
food
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continuosly
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continuously
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, if they want to live a healthy life,
this
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unhealthy
lifestlye
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lifestyle
of diet has to be given up by the community stubbornly.
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, the issue of unhealthy
lifestlye
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lifestyles
of
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society can not be resolved by the
government
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to put
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more
tax
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taxes
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on
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apply
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fast
food
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. The main reason is that the higher tax can be applied by the
authoraties
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authorities
but
consumption
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the consumption
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of unhealthy
food
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by the community can not be
controled
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controlled
by them.
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, lawmakers can just let people know about the pros and cons of the
food
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but every individual has to follow the instruction of
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government
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the government
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to make their
lifestlye
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lifestyle
better and healthy.
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, it is not the
government
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who
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that
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plays a great role into make life healthy rather it is only every single
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fool
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. To conclude, it is clear from the above discussion that every individual has to make their own choice to improve their health by avoiding the intake of fast
food
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as higher
authoraties
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authorities
can not do
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by applying much taxes on
food
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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