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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons? Is it a positive trend or a negative trend?

#culture #world #trend
Nowadays,every country in the world has its own
culture
 and language but because some reasons make all
culture
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cultures
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changing
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change
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to
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in
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 similar ways.If all specific
culture
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cultures
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 merge together to be world
culture
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cultures
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 that will be positive or negative in long term? To start with,I think I have three reasons why
culture
 is turning similar around the earth and I will explain in
next
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the next
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 paragraph.
Firstly
,I believe nowadays every country have communication with
other country
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another country
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 more than before and
that is
number
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the number
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 one reason
in
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for
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this
 statement because communication can make people
to
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apply
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understand each other due to contract
nation
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a nation
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 combine
culture
 together.
Secondly
,I
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