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Todays teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

#todays #teenagers #lives #generations
In the present day, with the
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advance
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 of urbanization and technology resulting in a
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 world, a plethora of
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adolescents
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overthinking
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their hectic lifestyle. I fully believe
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this
 view as
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 believe young people have more
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burdens
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 with their future. The most
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conspicuous
 reason is the
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 lifestyle. People in the past,
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had low resources but
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sufficient knowledge, which they research
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the libraries and sometimes by sharing each other information.
However
, nowadays,
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 the invention of
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 anybody can easily
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 knowledge
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 multiple unauthorized websites as well by unknown
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writers
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.
In addition
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this
, peer
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pressure
also
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 up in
this
 contemporary world, where everybody
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 in
thier
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their
 own
races
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 and
acheiving
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achieving
 no more skills.
For instance
, introverted students find it
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 more
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daunting
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 experience to lead
such
 a life where they even
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don't
 know where
this
 path is going. The more significant reason for supporting my view is the depression in every other
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adolescents
adolescent
. in every corner of
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 they set
a very high moral standards
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very high moral standards
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as a result
this
 leads to anxiety and stress
although
 they are talented
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they have no experience.
For instance
, a report conducted by Oxford University revealed that
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 in
India
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 thousands of students attempt to
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suicide
 after not selecting their job and for not getting a satisfactory result in examination each year. To conclude,
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 generation
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 the more the more struggling
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 than the
last
 decade of young people. In my
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 government must continue to
reasrch
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research
search
 the various of pressured reduction to ensure effective policies are in place.
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