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Animal are in danger of extinctions. Some people say we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

#danger #extinctions #people #animals #humans
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IT IS TRUE THAT MANY
SPECIES
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 OF LIFE HAVE IN EXTINCTIONS OR DISAPPEARED FROM THE
EARTH
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.SOME PEOPLE ASSERT THAT WE JUST NEED TO SAVE ONLY SOME
SPECIES
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 WHICH IS HELPFUL IN SOME WAYS TO US. I DISAGREE WITH
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 STATEMENT. TO COMMENCE THAT, EVERY
SPECIES
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 OR HUMAN ARE DEPENDING ON EACHOTHER OR THERE IS ONE CYCLE THAT
MAKE
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 STABILITY OF
EARTH
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. TO ELABORATE ,
SPECIES
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 GIVE MUCH SUPPORT TO HUMANS IN MANY POINTS. IF THE CYCLE IS BROKEN AT ANY POINT, THERE WILL BECOME A DISASTER FOR EVERY OTHER
SPECIES
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. FOR ILLUSTRATION, JUST IMAGINATION , SHEAP WILL LOOP FROM OUR PLANET. WE CAN NOT GET NATURAL WOOL FROM ANY OTHER
SPECIES
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 OR ARTIFICIALLY.
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, WE NEED TO MORE SUFFER IN COOL PLANCE OR WINTER TIME.
FURTHER
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 STRENGTHENING THE VIEW , SCIENTISTS DO MANY EXPERIMENTS ON VARIOUS KINDS OF ANIMALS AND
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 SOME OF THE USEFUL IN MEDICAL SCIENCE. TO EXPLICATE ,SOME
SPECIES
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 PARTS ARE MORE USEFUL FOR SOME KIND OF SPECIAL MEDICINES .
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, SCIENTISTS CAN DO EXPERIMENTS ON THE ANIMALS ,BEFORE THEY WILL GIVE THEM TO US AS MEDICINE.
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 , WE CAN NOT NEED TO MAKE ANY EXPERIMENTS ON OUR BODIES OR PEOPLE.
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 , GOVERNMENT NEED TO PROVIDE SOME SPECIAL FUNDING FOR SAVING OR PROTECTING THE ALL KIND OF
SPECIES
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, WHO IS AVAILABLE ON THE
EARTH
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. TO CONCLUDE, WE ALL KNOW THAT HUMAN IS THE MOST POWERFUL SPECIE ON THE
EARTH
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 THAN OTHERS. DEFINITELY, WE NEED TO THINK OR NOT BECOME HARMFUL TO OTHERS. BECAUSE
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THIS
, WE ALL DEPEND ON EACH OTHER . IN THE
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 SAVE ANIMALS SAVE PLANETS.
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