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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bar. To what extent do you agree?

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The bar chart illustrates how many
visitors
in
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 4 different London museums from June to October. It is apparent that the
British
museum
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 was the most popular
museum
 as opposed to the national
museum
 during the period.
Moreover
, August was the month which had the highest number of
visitors
. At a closer look, in June and
july
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, there were more than 400000
visitors
 to the History
museum
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, the
British
museum
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 and the science
museum
, while the national
museum
’s number was around 200000
visitors
. During the following month, the
British
museum
 witnessed a significant increase to 700000
visitors
that
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 was
the
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 similar trend
for
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 the history
museum
 and the National
museum
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 with 600000 and 300000 respectively. Meanwhile, the figure for the Science
museum
 remained stable. In September , the number of
people
went
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 to
History
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the History
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museum
 gradually declined by roughly 200000
people
 while the
British
museum
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 and the National
museum
 dropped by 100000
people
 each.
In contrast
, the data for the Science
museum
 rose to 500000
visitors
 before falling sharply to 300000 one month later.
Finally
, in October, there was a continual fall in the
amount
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 of
people
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who visited
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visited
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 4
museum
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