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rural
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pie
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1993 as compared to
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 the highest
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poverty
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 in 2002 The regions like
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 East & North Africa, South
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decreased slightly from the year 1993 to 2002.
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,
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 East
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of poverty
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 than urban
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poverty
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people in the rural
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 more
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. The urban
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that people who are living are educated and employees are more and
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the illitercy
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illiteracy
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