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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In our fast-modernized society,
although
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 lots of
people
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 are supplied with a job
that is
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 not fulfilling or lack
of
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money, they
satisfied
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are satisfied
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 with their occupation.
However
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, other
folk
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 declare
this
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 is important to develop that kind of
situations
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situation
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. It is greater for
people
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 to try for
better
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a better
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life
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 and job satisfaction. I firmly
agree
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toagree
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 the latter idea.
To begin
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, the major reason that
people
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 think that they should accept their circumstances since they are so afraid to test themselves with new situations
such
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 as finding
new
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 job, start-up a business, and so forth. They have
no
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 enough power and trust to themselves for changing their
life
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. They tend to show gratitude for what they already have in their
life
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. To substantiate the idea, I would like to quote the philosophy of the Stoic's that "take
life
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 as it comes" It is absolutely good but
people
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 must not stay
in
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at
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 the same level, they always
mist
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must
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 try and improve their abilities as
possible
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much possible
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 as they can.
On the other hand
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, there are several alternatives to enhance that kind of bad
situations
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situation
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. In fact, nothing will improve without giving it a try. It
is firmly believe
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 that developments are always possible with a correct type of
attitudetherefore
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attitude therefore
, now various events that help them are increasing,
for example
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, psychologists and motivators who increase their self-confidence. These
people
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 help
people
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 with low self-confidence and inner fear and increase their confidence and purpose in
life
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. In conclusion,
although
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 some
people
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 consider that they should accept their standard
life
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, I strongly agree that we need to improve our
life
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 better and everyone can respect us.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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