Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible?*

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Nowadays , despite all the detrimental actions that happening around us, the most crucial thing for human beings is to scold them for their actions. In my personal opinion,
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they will never commit crimes again.
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which they will have the least tendency to do delict. Before everything,
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be prepared for something that is socially believed as a crime.
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, awareness of the burglary of a neighbour causes you to start being rude over his request which might be related to his demand he is in need of the
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ordinary life. they should just be punished for prevention.
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, the most powerful the justice system you have in your country, the more safe environment you will have. In the
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all requirements of the community should be satisfied, if there will not any financial needs
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want to commit the crimes.
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, before anything else, the education system should be done
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best to nurture people in a way in which never they think about doing anything against the law. To sum up, doing reaction against the law and replication what they will
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from the community is the most challenging matter nowadays ,
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, all communities want to deeply enquiry
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and for prevention know the main cause. Personally, Committing a crime
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lots of reasons and should be berated by people and governors should control and make strong reactions
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their actions.
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