Question-Large companies use sports events to promote their products.Some people think this has a negative impact on sports.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people are of the opinion that advertising products in sports events
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adverse effects on
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game
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.I strongly disagree with the statement because I believe that it is advantageous for companies as well as
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audience.Below are some
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viewpoint to support my statement. On the one hand,using programs and
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for advertisement is very common in
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scenario and it resulted in favour of the big companies and sports.It motivates
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amuse
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and
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them to win the game.
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,to maintain the reputation of the advertising brand and themselves they play hard and it improves their game.So,promoting products in events enhances the play power.
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,it is often seen that a successful individual or team always endorses some of the brands,which encourages them to maintain their winning streak.
On the contrary
,one of the negative
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of promoting products during
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of outdoor events is that the team spirit or
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sport spirit
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somewhere while maintaining the superiority of brands.It
also
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mental
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health of the player.
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,while branding if the sale of advertising
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drops,it will have an adverse effect on
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health of the sportsperson,which results in bad performance.
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negative impact on flourishing oneself. To conclude,I completely disagree with the statement that branding has a negative impact on physical recreation because branding leads to
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the
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and determination for success in play.
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