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Scientists tell us some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that million of people continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions?

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Nowadays despite all the various types of clues we have about our healthy lifestyle, most of them are not successful to capture
people
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's attention ,plus extra warnings released by pundits have not been noticed by
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 and
people
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 still continue their previous methods of living and nourishments. In my opinion,
people
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's
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 contains many big and small issues which will not let them think the detrimental movements and just want to do their routine work. Eliminating all problems will help communities to follow all recommendations and a healthy way of
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. On the
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 hand, making structure for
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's safety is
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 criterion but the most important
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 is to encourage them to follow the notices and adapt them to their
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. With
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 regard, authorities should organize some macro-political for health activities and set some advantages for
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 who uses these structures.
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, providing free bicycles to reduce the amount of usage of private means of transport or make some noticeable discount for using
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 who uses public transportation. Considering that, the huge support will be happened by the government and folks will not be worried about the expense of the utilization of the new structure.
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 , some health movement does not need a special device, it is just about your lifestyle and should be complied but the community still do not care about the noxious relocating. In these cases, the educational system could be played an active role and make
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 obey the rules or even recommendations which are just suited for their liv. For illustration, making a special compulsory lesson for pupils to teach them the real way of
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 to keep
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safety
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. to sum up, there are many healthy lifestyles in which special frameworks will be given to residents by experts to amend their way of
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 and cause well-being. In spite of that
people
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 still follow their own rules for safe, the best dissolution to affect all these programs is that special problems in their
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 must be resolved and intensive schemes should be set up by authorities.
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