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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Using
animals
 as
test
 material in the labs is one of the hottest topics in recent years. While it is clear that many scientific breakthroughs were started by experimenting on
animals
. many animal welfare groups and activists think
this
 action is unjustifiable and shall be prevented and identified as torture.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view and conclude why
animals
 are crucial in scientific discoveries. No one can accept or justify the torturing of
animals
. Animal welfare is an essential law in all countries.
However
, many of them were used to
test
 new technologies or got injected with unknown substances. Activist groups in animal welfare believe these experiments shall be stopped as there are other options
such
 as computer simulation to
test
 the new drugs and other medical surgeries. Even though, they think the giant businesses are
also
 overusing the
animals
 in their tests and getting killed without reason.
On the other hand
, No one can deny the importance of using
animals
 in the labs. Most of the
last
 century's medical breakthroughs in innovations started with an experiment on
animals
.
Moreover
, testing new things on
animals
 is way better than doing it on the human body which is illegal in all countries. Unfortunately, there is no other way to
test
 medical treatments and drugs, the early stages of new bills shall be tested on animal bodies and study how their body is reacting to the new substances.
This
 will make sure that people will not get sick from them later on. In conclusion. While there is no other option than to use
animals
 in the labs, medical researchers and organizations have to consider the animal's right to live without pain.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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