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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books beacause they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #beacause
The
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unpredictable
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 pattern of society brings several notable notions with them ,
the
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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 is one of them. Many
claiming
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 that
read
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newspapers
 in future will be
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decline
declined
.
However
, in
this
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easy
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eassy
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i
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 will discuss both positive and negative effects and give a suitable conclusion To commence with, there is no doubt that
newspapers
 help individuals
alot
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a lot
. To justify it,
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newspaper
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 everyone gets knowledge about
day to day
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 happening.
In addition
 , it is more beneficial for children because they improve their vocabulary and pronunciation skills
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this
 .
For example
, many masses are poor and they
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newspapers
 daily
for
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 their bread and butter.
As a result
, we can say that
newspapers
also
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affective
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for
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 making money.
On the other hand
, no one can ignore that technology makes human life more comfortable and easier. Nowadays due to busy schedules people cannot read
newspapers
 so, they prefer online news like tv or
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a mobile
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 phone which gives them updates every
minutes
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,
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the masses
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masses
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 time
moreover
, they listen
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 and
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 video watch which is
also
 beneficial for them.
Thus
 ,
newspapers
replaced
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were replaced
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 with
internat
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internet
. To conclude, I would say that,
internet
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 is more effective for people but no one
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newspapers
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