Nowadays, the mobile phone plays a major role in our lives, which brings many benefits to us but also contains some drawbacks. Both these sides will discussed in this essay.

Two plans give information about the ground floor of the particular art
gallery
in 2005 and
at
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the present day. Overall, comparing the two planning maps there are some massive differences in the planning of the ground floor. Beginning with comparing differences between entrances, in 2005 there were just steps, in the present day holders of the
gallery
introduced ramps to wheelchairs.
Moreover
, a lift was added near the stairs to the upper floor as well as a children's area,
gallery
shop and temporary exhibitions. The
right wing
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of the
gallery
has no changes, the
exhibition
room
1,
exhibition
room
2 and
exhibition
room
3
has
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stayed at their places without any change. The reception desk has changed its place and
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oval.
Instead
of the
exhibition
room
4 the
gallery
owner introduced a children's area and temporary
exhibition
.
Instead
of a cafe and shop, a
gallery
shop. In the place of the
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office was launched vending machines.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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