Nowadays, the mobile phone plays a major role in our lives, which brings many benefits to us but also contains some drawbacks. Both these sides will discussed in this essay.

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Two plans give information about the ground floor of the particular art

gallery

in 2005 and

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the present day. Overall, comparing the two planning maps there are some massive differences in the planning of the ground floor. Beginning with comparing differences between entrances, in 2005 there were just steps, in the present day holders of the

gallery

introduced ramps to wheelchairs.

Moreover

, a lift was added near the stairs to the upper floor as well as a children's area,

gallery

shop and temporary exhibitions. The

right wing

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of the

gallery

has no changes, the

exhibition

room

exhibition

room

2 and

exhibition

room

has

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stayed at their places without any change. The reception desk has changed its place and

become

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oval.

Instead

of the

exhibition

room

4 the

gallery

owner introduced a children's area and temporary

exhibition

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of a cafe and shop, a

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shop. In the place of the

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office was launched vending machines.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

159 words

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